Elodie is a popular name, I had a few colleagues called Elodie, some called Dubois but not both, also her full name is D. E. D. Daphne Elodie Dubois. Big D da house! ;) Have to write up a character background methinks.
A lot going on here. I'll admit I had to read it twice to catch all of the details. Intrigued by this line:
"The accident interfered with his timeline."
Feels like there's a sense of predestination to this, or maybe I'm reading to much into it. Regardless, I like it a lot. The pacing, as Claudia notes, is great, there's some great descriptive phrases, especially that opening paragraph! Really sets the scene. Wasn't expecting the more futuristic-ness when the holoband popped into play, but I'm down with it :)
Thanks, Nathan. A little excursion into tales of ratiocination. Let's see how Elodie will fare. She has a smart assistant, so what can go wrong?
Ah, yes. Elodie has been profiling her suspect ever since poor Timmy died (Black Ice, Origin Story/Prologue) all those years ago. Something definitely is afoot!
I will need to honker down and get my police vocabulary up to speed. STAT.
Also, that bicycle paragraph!! Incredible. Really cleverly done, Alexander. You often have a nice way of setting up the atmosphere and then diving into some compelling dialogue.
Glad you found it intriguing! A prerequisite for this genre (or any). Ah yes, that bike, I wondered how far I can push it, there's a whole backstory as to how it ended up that way, too. Dee may have to investigate further, to get the full picture.
I didn't read Black Ice, but I am in, Alexander. I love it when a story gets right down to business in the first paragraph. No fooling around! Nice to have a bit of French thrown into the mix and the new bits of technology.
Thanks, Sharron. AI is fighting crime as we speak, so why not make Watson digital? Thanks for joining the ride! Dee wanted to become a detective since she was a child, esp. after what happened at that pond.
Very good pacing, I’m looking forward to the next part.
Thanks, Claudia. Elodie has a lot of work and hard cases... let's see how it goes!
Good luck to Elodie with her cases 😉!
She's going to need it! :D
Fun fact, my husband had two French colleagues called Elodie in the same company in Munich.
Elodie is a popular name, I had a few colleagues called Elodie, some called Dubois but not both, also her full name is D. E. D. Daphne Elodie Dubois. Big D da house! ;) Have to write up a character background methinks.
D.E.D? Leave to Alexander to come up with a cool acronym. 👏
Très bien!!
A lot going on here. I'll admit I had to read it twice to catch all of the details. Intrigued by this line:
"The accident interfered with his timeline."
Feels like there's a sense of predestination to this, or maybe I'm reading to much into it. Regardless, I like it a lot. The pacing, as Claudia notes, is great, there's some great descriptive phrases, especially that opening paragraph! Really sets the scene. Wasn't expecting the more futuristic-ness when the holoband popped into play, but I'm down with it :)
Looking forward to how this all unfolds!
Thanks, Nathan. A little excursion into tales of ratiocination. Let's see how Elodie will fare. She has a smart assistant, so what can go wrong?
Ah, yes. Elodie has been profiling her suspect ever since poor Timmy died (Black Ice, Origin Story/Prologue) all those years ago. Something definitely is afoot!
I will need to honker down and get my police vocabulary up to speed. STAT.
Ah, of course of course, I forgot she was explicitly named in that piece. Very good, very good.
10-4.
So intrigued. I love a detective story.
Also, that bicycle paragraph!! Incredible. Really cleverly done, Alexander. You often have a nice way of setting up the atmosphere and then diving into some compelling dialogue.
Glad you found it intriguing! A prerequisite for this genre (or any). Ah yes, that bike, I wondered how far I can push it, there's a whole backstory as to how it ended up that way, too. Dee may have to investigate further, to get the full picture.
Yes please 🙋🏼♀️
I didn't read Black Ice, but I am in, Alexander. I love it when a story gets right down to business in the first paragraph. No fooling around! Nice to have a bit of French thrown into the mix and the new bits of technology.
Thanks, Sharron. AI is fighting crime as we speak, so why not make Watson digital? Thanks for joining the ride! Dee wanted to become a detective since she was a child, esp. after what happened at that pond.
Nice hook.