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Nov 22, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

"... the rhythmic march of feet that bore but ill fortune." “I am the one who will unmake you."

"... she jumped him and snapped his neck like a twig."

"The Unmaker pointed at Zed. “You. You decide who dies—Choose.”

I haven't read previous episodes yet, but this one was excellent standing alone! Bold! Ugly! I loved it, Alexander.

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Thanks, Sharron. Glad you liked it! It took on a bit of a life on its own halfway through.

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Nov 22, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

Yes. I know exactly what you mean. Our characters take over and we sit back and watch the spectacle. Especially so, when they are our "alter egos." Eeeks!

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Ha! Yes, then again, I have no idea where Burt and Reg, came from, let’s say they were Trolls in another life ;)

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Brilliantly descriptive writing here, Alexander. Nathan and Sharron have quoted some great passages but really the whole chapter was full of wonderfully drawn scenes

Definitely got a vibe of the trolls from the Hobbit with Reg and Burt. Too much chatting leading to their demise! 😁

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Thanks, Daniel. Appreciate the comment and what an intertextual connection! Yes, indeed, bad guys really need to learn how to shut up, eh? :)

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Nov 22, 2023·edited Nov 22, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

"Locksley. I'll cut your heart out with a spoon."

"Why a spoon, cousin? Why not an axe?"

"Because it's DULL, you twit. It'll hurt more."

The spoon lines made me think of this ^ Prince of Thieves Alan Rickman moment 😅

And yet it continues still! How many more? Will one have to be sacrified?

Great work. I really like this description here.

The tent flap opened, and the man who had spoken entered. An ugly scar ran from his left ear across his face to the other side of his chin. He was holding up a spoon, licking the side of it clean. He rubbed his bald head with his other hand and wiped it on his tattered brown robe, fastened with a dirty cord. It made him look like a crazed monk looking for food.

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Ahh, of course! Alan Rickman. May he rest in peace. Loved him in Robin Hood. (https://youtu.be/MhfuuKiTcYQ?si=FilfErpwVthfX_LN) Completely forgot about that one. Must rewatch.

There's the conclusion next week and that's it. I have the outline done already, just need to write it all down.

Glad you found it appealing! Let's see how it all fits together in the end. :)

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Nov 22, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

That's the one!

Ah, excellent. Good to hear. Look forward to it.

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Trouble, trouble.

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All is set for the final act. Ālea iacta est.

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You've written another exciting scene here but I especially like the way you talk about choices potentially all leading to the same end. Fate/free will tension. I love that dilemma and pondering what all this action means in the greater scheme of things.

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Thanks, Kate! Much appreciated. Fate/free will is a dilemma that runs through my novel as well, a recurring theme. How free is free will, how random is random, and is everything connected? I don't pretend to go so deep in this little SF romp but I will try to let it come to a satisfactory conclusion.

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