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Aug 16, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

Well, I was going to say "aliens", but Jackie got there first 😅

Another snappy chapter that continues to dangle the carrot of "what is going to happen?!!"

Already looking forward to next week's instalment!

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Thanks, Nathan! So predictable! Silly Carter couldn't see it coming. The carrot dangling is coming to an end... next week when Sam ... oh wait, too soon!

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Aug 17, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

No, wait... come back ... what were you about to say??

😜

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But what about the snakes?

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They are on a Plane to Germany.

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lololol

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Aug 17, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

bahaha

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Really enjoyed the great dialogue between the two characters this week, Alexander. Cracked along at a fair pace and was almost an adventure scene in its own right 😁

Looking forward to the finale next week 👍🏼

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Thanks, Daniel! Always tricky, with only dialogue, might as well be a screenplay, ey? The final curtain draws near!

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Fast-paced, snappy, adventurous like old-school Indy films. I'm so excited for more!

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Thanks, Nadia. The Greatest Adventure Returns! 😁

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The greatest of the greatestests!

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Always copy from the Great Adventures to make it so 🤣

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Roflmao

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Glad I can binge this!

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Glad you’re enjoying it!

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I second Vanessa’s comment regarding your use of dialogue. It’s very nicely executed. Look forward to the next installment.

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Thanks Daniel, much appreciated. Conclusion will go live tomorrow!

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Aug 18, 2023Liked by Alexander Ipfelkofer

Hm I think I've gotten used to your snappy & vaguely satirical prose. This was quite enjoyable! I love dialogue, how you can play with it & make it do so many things for the story. Yours was so well-executed in this chapter, I always knew who was speaking & the pacing is great.

Also, my money's on Atlantis. :D

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Thanks much, Vanessa for sticking with it. Happy you found your way into it. I try to be subtle with the satire, but overall I hope it surfaces often enough. There's almost only dialogue in this chapter/scene/beat and oftentimes creative writing classes will tell you to break it up and esp. in screenwriting, too much dialogue is often a red flag. Need to keep the action moving, the beats beating... so they can discover ... Atlantis? Maybe. Tune in next week for the conclusion! ;)

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