Another great chapter, Alexander. A compelling mix of philosophical musings and following our gangs adventures through wonderfully realised locations. You perfectly captured the need for humans to follow or believe in a “something” rather than just forging and following their own path. Things rapidly coming to a head as well for our intrepid Samuel and his companions. I would imagine next week is going to be a stormer. Already looking forward to it 😁. Nicely done 👍🏼
Thanks, Dan! Yes, rapidity is certainly the motto now that we have reached the end, the final chapter to what has started with a phone call so many months ago! Thank you for coming along this journey!
The POV switch, yes, tricky. I was hesitant, almost switched them around, contemplated not doing the first one but in the end I felt it was needed. Thanks for reading, Nathan! On to the final chapter!
"...merchants were ready to sell T-shirts, mugs, magnets, .... people taking selfies.... falling on their knees praying...." ha ha ha. I can just picture it. Like a Trump rally ...
"The sun’s first rays danced across the desert, and with it came an absence of sound so complete it was deafening." Nice line.
The presentation of two separate POVs was very effective here, Alexander -- the view from the desert, and the speculative "view" of the adventurers. Tricky!
So many lovely lines in this chapter. I'm especially fond of the calm but chilling phrase "The sun had not yet risen, and the desert lay before them, silent and patiently waiting, guarding its secrets beneath endless sands." The ending gives me goosebumps.
Another great chapter, Alexander. A compelling mix of philosophical musings and following our gangs adventures through wonderfully realised locations. You perfectly captured the need for humans to follow or believe in a “something” rather than just forging and following their own path. Things rapidly coming to a head as well for our intrepid Samuel and his companions. I would imagine next week is going to be a stormer. Already looking forward to it 😁. Nicely done 👍🏼
Thanks, Dan! Yes, rapidity is certainly the motto now that we have reached the end, the final chapter to what has started with a phone call so many months ago! Thank you for coming along this journey!
Echoes of an epic story! I can see the way your diction works this aspect up. Like it!
Thanks, Kate! Yes, circling back to the beginning, sort of. Great to hear it works!
Superb chapter, Alexander. Lots of fantastic prose here, too. Really rich, but still maintains the pace.
I like the dual viewpoints we get of the event.
"Unimpressed, the sun traversed the sky in its unrelenting march..." another line I really enjoyed.
The POV switch, yes, tricky. I was hesitant, almost switched them around, contemplated not doing the first one but in the end I felt it was needed. Thanks for reading, Nathan! On to the final chapter!
I think it was the correct choice. Worked for me. Plus, the *** was there to signal the break ;)
Praised be the dinkus! ;)
"It only lasted a moment or forever." Oh how wonderful a line!!
💛 Thanks, Nathan!
"...merchants were ready to sell T-shirts, mugs, magnets, .... people taking selfies.... falling on their knees praying...." ha ha ha. I can just picture it. Like a Trump rally ...
"The sun’s first rays danced across the desert, and with it came an absence of sound so complete it was deafening." Nice line.
The presentation of two separate POVs was very effective here, Alexander -- the view from the desert, and the speculative "view" of the adventurers. Tricky!
Thanks Sharron, the POVs are always tricky, glad you found it worked. I had half a mind of switching them around but decided against it, in the end.
Thanks for reading!
So many lovely lines in this chapter. I'm especially fond of the calm but chilling phrase "The sun had not yet risen, and the desert lay before them, silent and patiently waiting, guarding its secrets beneath endless sands." The ending gives me goosebumps.
Thanks, Nadia! Goosebumps, to prepare you for what is to come, has to come, what you must expect. The pretzel. ;)