"...she did not know what she felt, only that her hunger to cut ran deeper than any wound."
“I’ll cut out his tongue.” “Easy now, we want him to sing." The reference to Beaumont's Lab gave us that piece we needed to know about this woman. Outstanding description of her battle! So visual, physical, I could smell the sweat and blood. Super!
Thank you, Sharron. Yes, was contemplating how much of Bellatrix past I can reveal, but as you say, we need to know at least a little. More to come! Penultimate chapter next week.
Lots and lots to love in this, Alexander. Great action set-pieces, really well described and super visual.
Here are the lines that I found most outstanding:
A wiry, thin fellow, peddling souvenirs that magically appeared from under his many folds, had attached himself to Bellatrix, and was trying to sell her a heart scarab along with a Nile cruise on his boat for a one-time only deal of fifty pounds. -- very accurate feeling of what it can be like wandering through busy bazaars.
Theodore couldn’t help but grin, albeit a little worried for the man. Bellatrix was at the brink of a steely demonstration when Thorne pulled her aside into a corner, pointing straight ahead. -- just nice and snappy line, giving more to the reader about Thorne's internal thoughts and adding further to Bellatrix.
Bellatrix snarled, her blades whirring through the air, and two attackers fell to the ground before they could take another step. The remaining three drew automatic weapons and started firing at the empty spot where she had dealt out death a second before.
He lurched forward, a thrust and a stab. She sidestepped, spun around him, her blade singing all the way. He took one step, another and fell to his knees, both hands still holding his swords lying on the ground before him, the last thing he saw before his head landed between them. -- fantastic action sequence! Tight.
“Well, so much for keeping a low profile,” said Thorne, stepping over the severed body parts. -- hehe, loved this closing line. You manage to keep this light humour throughout Carter, which is really impressive.
Looks like you liked it! :) Which makes me very happy, Thanks, Nathan. Regarding the humour, I was indeed wondering if the ending line would maybe clash with the visceral action that went before but then again, it's what I do.
"...she did not know what she felt, only that her hunger to cut ran deeper than any wound."
“I’ll cut out his tongue.” “Easy now, we want him to sing." The reference to Beaumont's Lab gave us that piece we needed to know about this woman. Outstanding description of her battle! So visual, physical, I could smell the sweat and blood. Super!
Thank you, Sharron. Yes, was contemplating how much of Bellatrix past I can reveal, but as you say, we need to know at least a little. More to come! Penultimate chapter next week.
Lots and lots to love in this, Alexander. Great action set-pieces, really well described and super visual.
Here are the lines that I found most outstanding:
A wiry, thin fellow, peddling souvenirs that magically appeared from under his many folds, had attached himself to Bellatrix, and was trying to sell her a heart scarab along with a Nile cruise on his boat for a one-time only deal of fifty pounds. -- very accurate feeling of what it can be like wandering through busy bazaars.
Theodore couldn’t help but grin, albeit a little worried for the man. Bellatrix was at the brink of a steely demonstration when Thorne pulled her aside into a corner, pointing straight ahead. -- just nice and snappy line, giving more to the reader about Thorne's internal thoughts and adding further to Bellatrix.
Bellatrix snarled, her blades whirring through the air, and two attackers fell to the ground before they could take another step. The remaining three drew automatic weapons and started firing at the empty spot where she had dealt out death a second before.
He lurched forward, a thrust and a stab. She sidestepped, spun around him, her blade singing all the way. He took one step, another and fell to his knees, both hands still holding his swords lying on the ground before him, the last thing he saw before his head landed between them. -- fantastic action sequence! Tight.
“Well, so much for keeping a low profile,” said Thorne, stepping over the severed body parts. -- hehe, loved this closing line. You manage to keep this light humour throughout Carter, which is really impressive.
Looks like you liked it! :) Which makes me very happy, Thanks, Nathan. Regarding the humour, I was indeed wondering if the ending line would maybe clash with the visceral action that went before but then again, it's what I do.
Nope, it was perfect! Nailed it.
🙌 great to hear. next week is going to be mad!
Dang, the action is fire in the last moments. Of course Theodore had to make a joke at the end. Which I love! He is truly such an Ash from Evil Dead.
🔥⚔️ Yeah, I couldn't just end it with him hiding in the corner, could I? ;) Penultimate chapter incoming. Some serious shit is gonna go down.
Sounds so skerry!!!
sounds so exciting!!!
Awesome! What atmosphere and action! Masterfully done Alexander, as usual!
Thank you, Jenny! So glad you liked it. Penultimate chapter next week!