Thanks, Nathan. A crimson a week makes the reader peek. There were two crimsons (bed and mark) last week as well. I may have to switch to ruby next week, so as not to wear out the letters. I do like the word. ;)
Great story, Alexander. I was completely drawn in by the pacing and the movement of the character through the streets, through the mental twist. I was reminded also of Babette in Don DeLillo’s “White Noise” and her fear of death driving her to trade her body for the experimental drug Dylar. And Babette’s husband Jack experiencing the similar paranoia (well I guess its not paranoia of it turns about to be a fact) as he hunts down his tormentor. Even if it’s not a perfect pairing, anytime i can make a connection to DeLillo makes me enjoy the read! Thanks again and nice work throwing some crimson in there….i feel this may have been a coordinated effort with Nathan lol.
Great comment, Brian! I have to check out "White Noise". Haven't read anything by Don DeLillo (yet). It sounds like that will need to change! In fact, just ordered it and it's on my Kindle now. First I'll have to finish off "Horatio" ... I mean writing it.
The crimson thread must continue! It could indeed be an intertextual element between various writers, picking up words here and there. I for sure do pick up new words all the time (and forget them again as quickly).
"...we both retired to the room where passion was but a faint memory......" "Lives lived on the irrevocable rails of destiny...." "I knew it to be a lie, yet I believed, I chose to believe, it was easier than facing the truth. " "Immortality, after all, is something people will kill for, that and a new pair of shoes." My aged brain really couldn't figure out what the hell was going on in this wild story, but with lines like these, it doesn't matter! Chilling last sentence. Brilliant, Alexander.
Chilling, Alexander. Some gorgeous prose in here, just like in the first entry.
Dark and mysterious continuation.
I will be rereading all of these once the final third is out!
PS you managed a "crimson" this week too ;)
Thanks, Nathan. A crimson a week makes the reader peek. There were two crimsons (bed and mark) last week as well. I may have to switch to ruby next week, so as not to wear out the letters. I do like the word. ;)
Ahh, so maybe your crimsons last week led me to title with crimson this week ;)
A crimson thread that runs deep ;)
Great story, Alexander. I was completely drawn in by the pacing and the movement of the character through the streets, through the mental twist. I was reminded also of Babette in Don DeLillo’s “White Noise” and her fear of death driving her to trade her body for the experimental drug Dylar. And Babette’s husband Jack experiencing the similar paranoia (well I guess its not paranoia of it turns about to be a fact) as he hunts down his tormentor. Even if it’s not a perfect pairing, anytime i can make a connection to DeLillo makes me enjoy the read! Thanks again and nice work throwing some crimson in there….i feel this may have been a coordinated effort with Nathan lol.
Great comment, Brian! I have to check out "White Noise". Haven't read anything by Don DeLillo (yet). It sounds like that will need to change! In fact, just ordered it and it's on my Kindle now. First I'll have to finish off "Horatio" ... I mean writing it.
The crimson thread must continue! It could indeed be an intertextual element between various writers, picking up words here and there. I for sure do pick up new words all the time (and forget them again as quickly).
Glad you enjoyed the story thus far!
Mysterious and intriguing!
I learned a new word: ratiocination. Thank you for that as well!
Great read, Alexander.
Thanks, Kate! Glad you enjoyed it. I have to thank Edgar for the word, master of tales of ratiocination.
Very dark and crimson-y continuation! That drill sound at the end is droning in my ears now.
Mask the whirring with some cowboy music! ;)
LOL
Brilliantly done Alexander and the last line genuinely made me exclaim “Ooft” out loud! 😆
Thanks, Dan. It’s great to hear the build-up worked! Now, how will this all end? We’ll find out together.
"...we both retired to the room where passion was but a faint memory......" "Lives lived on the irrevocable rails of destiny...." "I knew it to be a lie, yet I believed, I chose to believe, it was easier than facing the truth. " "Immortality, after all, is something people will kill for, that and a new pair of shoes." My aged brain really couldn't figure out what the hell was going on in this wild story, but with lines like these, it doesn't matter! Chilling last sentence. Brilliant, Alexander.
Thanks, Sharron, happy to hear you enjoyed it. Horatio is just as confused, trying to figure out what is happening to him… ;)
Horatio! Isn't it odd how these people we create are so real to us!
They demand to be made thus. ;)